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[rachael]

I read chapter IV. it is real good. Tomorrow, I will continue the story. Thanks for sharing fly.

[Cheza]

Excellent work, Fly! I love your attention to details.

[rachael]

Wow, Part V is good....will read part VI later.

[rachael]

Wow, Part VI goood too.

[bostongirl]

Part V1 - had a lump in my throat. Really good writing.

[FlyIntoOblivion]

Thanks everyone! I really do appreciate it.

[FlyIntoOblivion]

Part VII-this is the second to last part.

Blindly, one hand rubbing tear residue out of her eyes and the other groping for her engagement ring, Adelle stopped mid-stretch when her eyes fell on Kade, hunched over on the chair, running his slim fingers around the band of her ring, glowing slightly in the growing dawn light stabbing through the blinds. He glanced up at her, then back down. “I don’t think I deserved to give this to you.”

“Kade.” She stood and moved toward him, but he shook his head, and she sank back into the couch as he continued.

“I forgot that a relationship isn’t always fun. You can’t just pick and choose what parts of another person’s life you want to be involved in.” He glanced up at her. “I had no idea what you’re going through taking care of him. I’m sorry.”

“And how would you know now?” She pulled her knees up under her chin, and watched him.

“I went to go see him. When I realized what it meant for him to be dying, I…I was so ashamed to be accusing him of stealing you away. How selfish it was of me to steal a dying man’s happiness. Even if you are my fiancée, I think his needs come before mine.”

Adelle stood, stepped to him, sinking to her knees in front of him. She placed her arms on his lap, taking his hands. “I love you.”

He smiled lopsidedly. “I love you.” He held out the ring between his thumb and forefinger. “And would you still marry me?”

“You mean right now?” She poked the tip of his nose. “I think you should sleep a little at least before we run off and get married in a $50 Vegas chapel.”

“Of course not right now. I think my mother would have a heart attack if we told her the King was our pastor.”

Adelle held out her hand. “Well, it would make for an amusing Christmas dinner story.” She watched him slip the ring on her finger. “Your hands aren’t shaking this time.”

“Well, you’re not being nuzzled for an apple by a donkey in Peru this time, either.” He yawned. “Hey, do you expect me to sleep on the couch, or will you unlock the bedroom for me?”

“You have a key to the bedroom on your key ring, dearest.”

Kade pulled his keys out, frowning as Adelle pointed out a shiny silver key. “I thought that key went to the bicycle chain I lost last month.”

“No, I removed that key a couple weeks ago.”

“I was wondering if I had lost a key. I thought maybe the office’s pet iguana ate it.”

Adelle lay her head on his lap and giggled. “What would you do without me, Kade?”

“Well, I’d be able to get up and go to bed, for one thing.”

Adelle scowled and let him up. Kade chuckled, leaned over and kissed her forehead. “Night! Or morning!” He paused at the bedroom door. “You know that free concert next week? Do you think Rick would like to go?”

“He might. Do you want me to invite him?”

“Yes. I think it might be good for him to get out of that hospital once in awhile.”

She smiled. “I’ll ask him when I go to see him tomorrow.”

Kade grinned and nodded, disappearing into the bedroom. Adelle glanced down at her ring, making the light catch within it and sparkle. Suddenly, the sound of the newspaper hitting the door jolted her out of her reverie, and she went to fetch it, smiling as the door stuck with its faulty hinges.

[keysunset]

Very interesting story, Fly.

This line:

"I forgot that a relationship isn’t always fun. You can’t just pick and choose what parts of another person’s life you want to be involved in"

is so true for many types of relationships.

Thanks for posting your story.

[cfbj01]

I just read this - great story Fly.

[FlyIntoOblivion]

Thank you Key, CF. Last part!

Epilogue

Kade groaned, throwing his shoulder against the door, for the rain had made the door swell along with the twisted hinges, running over in his mind where he should order out from tonight, as Adelle wouldn’t be home from the hospital until late and Kade had been banned from using the stove. Rick had gotten worse, and Adelle was rarely home anymore. Kade sometimes wondered if she even came home some nights if she hadn’t been leaving him little reminders everywhere.

Passing the bedroom, Kade halted, hearing choking, childlike sobs from inside. He peered in through the dark. Adelle lay on her half of the bed, curled up tight inside herself, her pale, worn face drowning in tears. Kade crawled up beside her, but she tried to push away from him, curling up even tighter. “Addie…”

“He’s dead!” She cried out, loud and choked. “I couldn’t save him!”

“Hey, no, don’t talk like that. You saved him from dying alone. You did everything you could.”

“It wasn’t enough. I couldn’t…” her sobbing quieted, but her body heaved for ragged breaths.

“I know he was grateful for what you did for him. He wouldn’t have had anyone else with him when went, I’m sure of it.” He smoothed her hair away from her face, wiping tears away tenderly.

Adelle didn’t speak, only turned over to face him, sighing unevenly. Eventually, her body slacked, heavy and limp. Kade sighed, kissing her forehead, wiping his own eyes of silent, selfish tears.

[FlyIntoOblivion]

keysunset said:

Very interesting story, Fly.

This line:

"I forgot that a relationship isn’t always fun. You can’t just pick and choose what parts of another person’s life you want to be involved in"

is so true for many types of relationships.

Thanks for posting your story.

Thank you! I like that line a lot. I've had too many relationships where people don't want to deal with the ugly side of life; unfortunately, I think too many people try to ignore when their loved ones are hurt and really need attention.

[HY]

Fly, that was beautiful. Loved every bit of it. Even though it did make me


Keep up the great writing!

[FlyIntoOblivion]

hammeredyoung said:

Fly, that was beautiful. Loved every bit of it. #wub# Even though it did make me #cry#


Keep up the great writing!

Thank you.

[keysunset]

I did enjoy the story, Fly.

A little critique, and maybe you are already working on this, is that it seems a bit bare. Some more details in the story, all sorts - about the people, the relationships, the places, whatever - would "flesh it out" more for me. Maybe I don't have enough imagination to do it on my own.

HOWEVER, the story itself is a very good one and I really enjoyed reading it. I just want more!

xoxo

[nlt]

Loved it Fly!

[FlyIntoOblivion]

keysunset said:

I did enjoy the story, Fly.

A little critique, and maybe you are already working on this, is that it seems a bit bare. Some more details in the story, all sorts - about the people, the relationships, the places, whatever - would "flesh it out" more for me. Maybe I don't have enough imagination to do it on my own.

HOWEVER, the story itself is a very good one and I really enjoyed reading it. I just want more!

xoxo

I know, it is a little thin. That's the problem of publishing as you write sometimes-you don't think of how thin your story is until the end. I do have a couple additional parts in mind, so it will be a little more fleshed out. I feel that if I'm not convinced, my readers definitely are not.

[keysunset]

I know, it is a little thin. That's the problem of publishing as you write sometimes-you don't think of how thin your story is until the end.

Oh, but Fly, don't let that stop you from posting as you go! I do enjoy reading your writing.

[bostongirl]

fly - Wonderful story. It made the reader feel the character emotions. Good job. Look forwawrd to your next works

Boston

ps - I also thought that line "I forgot that a relationship isn't always fun" was awesome.

[starcrossed]

Great job Fly! I understand what you meant before, but this is a good story. Just do what you need to... and hopefully then you will be happy?. I still think it was well wriiten...

[rockfan]

Very nice work, Fly . You have such a talent for writing .