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Post by iwo on Mar 10, 2007 23:14:17 GMT -5
Welcome LMC, Nice work! Thank you for coming here  I like them all, but my favorite is Ballerina  |
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Post by starcrossed on Mar 11, 2007 11:52:54 GMT -5
I decide to show you one of my published works, when I was around 16 or 17 years old. The poem was published in Cassie Edwards 'Savage Spirit' (Leisure Books/ August 1994) a leisure Historical Romance. The poem was written for the book (which had an Apache theme) as requested by the books author. The language is Apache, so the following sentence is the English interpretation. Spirits in the MistListen to the spirits in the mist, they call into our Apache hearts. They give us courage and strength when we are in doubt. When our children cry out in hunger, they call out, "Nu' uka Biza' a' yo' n' ouudaah' nidida nzhu'." Come, little one, don't say anything. It is good. When our warriors go to battle, they give them knowledge of what is to come. When our bodies grow weak with age, they tell us we are young in spirit. They release our souls to the great world beyond, when it is time to go to the great counsel fire in the sky. Listen to the spirits in the mist, they call into our Apache hearts. I have had a few other published works, but I was just a kid. So I didn't do much with it after. Just loved to write. Never charged a cent for any of it. I just loved writing... Keep writing LMC! If that what you enjoy doing, just don't stop.  |
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Post by starcrossed on Mar 11, 2007 12:27:21 GMT -5
I wrote a few new one's.
The Kiss
He looks into her eyes.
Their hearts beat at a faster pace.
Bodies draw closer,
she gives a nervous laugh.
Anticipation grows.
A moment is shared.
Silence...
Two hearts agree to become one.
Heads bow gracefully,
an ancient pact of two souls.
Mouths open in silent prayer,
as lips meet in a single kiss beyond compare.
Life's breath is shared,
as they reluctantly move apart.
A new love is created.
A kiss is it's start.
Why can't you care
Why can't you care about me?
The way I loved you...
things are different.
You judge me.
Make me hurt.
I can't go through this again.
My words are my freedom,
yet you would prefer I lock them up,
and throw away the key.
Why do my words scare you?
Fear surrounded my heart...
that is no longer.
Nor,
are any of the tragic pains that you believe still fuel my poetic words.
They are my past.
I see my future.
Why do I need to be empty?
Acting the part of a corpse
is not my goal in life...
so hollow and lifeless.
I desire to be a woman filled with passion.
Someone to be loved,
for simply being me.
Please stop trying to change me...
I am simply me.
Forget the fight
Forget the fight
you are creating in your head.
I can see that this love is dead.
Every time
I come to bed at night,
you have already turned out the light.
No passion.
No love.
This is the beginning to get old.
Now you go out every night,
weekends away,
passing moments without a glance.
You hate me.
Want me to go away.
What happened to our love?
You once begged me to stay.
Forget the fight.
I see this is the end,
my bags are packed...
made plans to stay with friends.
I will not call you,
or ask for another chance.
This is quit over,
very sad circumstance.
So forget the fight...
I will be gone by twilight.
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Post by LMC on Mar 11, 2007 13:09:57 GMT -5
Thank you starcrossed, Iwo, and jet!  |
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Post by starcrossed on Mar 11, 2007 14:22:57 GMT -5
Honestly LMC...
I believe that if you really enjoy writing then go for it.
You are 14 years old and as time goes by, your writing style will only develop in leaps and bounds. Just always keep an open mind, and write from your heart. You will find that that honesty, will allow for your writing to burn brighter, rather than trying to write what you 'think' everyone wants to see.
I believe in your talent...I hope you believe in it too.
Star
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Post by iwo on Mar 12, 2007 21:33:47 GMT -5
Star, as always you're amazing me with your creativity! Your poems are not pretentious at all, I feel they represent you as a honest human being, and that is very precious  |
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Post by Ayesa86 on Mar 12, 2007 22:11:11 GMT -5
Okay, once again, I don't do this often, but here's one I wrote at 3AM a while back. I've been doing a hell of a lot of non-fiction reading lately, and the history of electricity has become rather fascinating to me; which is further heightened by the fact that my favourite inventor has always been Nikola Tesla; so this poem is kinda dedicated to him. Alternating Current Uncoiling
Lightning flashes
Illuminating pale skin
And even paler, intelligent eyes.
Sparks arch
From stork-like limbs
Clad in rich fabric.
Light dances
Across narrow fingers
Like blue flames.
Crackling at their master’s beck and call,
Wilder even than the wildest wind.
Bolts and strands of pure electricity—
Radiant death to most,
Only seem to
Caress that lonely figure
As if they know
That his heart belongs to them
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Post by iwo on Mar 13, 2007 1:06:59 GMT -5
Ayesa, Sometimes the best stuff comes at 3am, when your brain is on the edge of reality and start mixing day consciousness with night dreams... I like it a lot! I had to read it twice and the second time my subconsciousness told me it's about Marty, is it?...  |
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Post by starcrossed on Mar 13, 2007 1:50:37 GMT -5
Star, as always you're amazing me with your creativity! Your poems are not pretentious at all, I feel they represent you as a honest human being, and that is very precious [img src=" ![]() lovehammersecards.com/MCorg/smilies/hugs.gif"] [/IMG] [/quote] That is the sweetest thing that I have ever been told...   Thank you Iwo!!!..don't make me cry....need to go...  |
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Post by starcrossed on Mar 13, 2007 1:51:49 GMT -5
Great work Ayesa!!! Really love it!!!...need to go...Iwo made me feel all sappy...bye.
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Post by rockfan on Mar 13, 2007 7:32:35 GMT -5
Very nice work, ladies . |
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Post by LMC on Mar 13, 2007 11:37:13 GMT -5
Honestly LMC... I believe that if you really enjoy writing then go for it. You are 14 years old and as time goes by, your writing style will only develop in leaps and bounds. Just always keep an open mind, and write from your heart. You will find that that honesty, will allow for your writing to burn brighter, rather than trying to write what you 'think' everyone wants to see. I believe in your talent...I hope you believe in it too. Star Awww...thank you so much!!! That is really great advice! |
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Post by starcrossed on Mar 13, 2007 13:22:55 GMT -5
LMC,
You are a very talented young lady, and I wanted to let you know that. Keep writing and making music.
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Post by bostongirl on Mar 13, 2007 13:43:13 GMT -5
LMC - Amazing !!!!! Just keep writing if it give you something back. Thank you for sharing. I know how hard it is sometimes. I find this place a very safe place to express myself. Hope you do too. I just loved all your poems, hard to pick one as a favorite but I do love, love Shadow.
Boston
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Post by LMC on Mar 13, 2007 18:18:22 GMT -5
Thanks starcrossed and bostongirl!!!  |
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Post by Ayesa86 on Mar 13, 2007 20:29:04 GMT -5
Ayesa, Sometimes the best stuff comes at 3am, when your brain is on the edge of reality and start mixing day consciousness with night dreams... I like it a lot! I had to read it twice and the second time my subconsciousness told me it's about Marty, is it?... Oh dear! No, it isn't. It is actually about Nikola Tesla. |
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Post by iwo on Mar 14, 2007 19:14:20 GMT -5
Ayesa, Sometimes the best stuff comes at 3am, when your brain is on the edge of reality and start mixing day consciousness with night dreams... I like it a lot! I had to read it twice and the second time my subconsciousness told me it's about Marty, is it?... Oh dear! No, it isn't. It is actually about Nikola Tesla.  I got it now,...how embarrassed I am, I'm gonna jump ;D |
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Post by LMC on Mar 14, 2007 19:53:05 GMT -5
Ok...this in not complete yet.
I can't believe that you did this to me
I can't believe I thought we were meant to be
I can't believe you just left me
Broken inside
Now i'm trying to put the pieces together
I'm trying to find out what went wrong
But it's so hard now
But I will make it through
Even though I don't have you
We'll go our seperate ways
I won't look back
I'll find someone new
Who will treat me better than you
And you'll be in the past
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What'd you think???
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Post by starcrossed on Mar 14, 2007 20:17:27 GMT -5
Now that is what I was talking about!!!  BRAVO!!! See LMC...your talent is already showing so much more!!! Keep up the writing, you have a gift. Honestly, that 'work in progress' piece is great. Very honest for a young lady of your age. I love it!!! Star |
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Post by christianna on Mar 14, 2007 21:17:52 GMT -5
would it be ok if I threw something in? I don't let ANYONE read my thoughts, but since you don't know me it might be alright
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