Well I was an Honorable Mention in the Trees Karaoke contest, so you get a voice as a bonus along with the music.
Working over the song I have a gut feeling that it is too long. Now I hope that anything I say in this regard will not offend anyone, particularly since I was rather a latecomer into the whole thread. Here is what I am suggesting:
Dear Marty, a gift from your fans at mc.org
stay tuned, don't move, there's much much more
we hope you enjoy it cuz it's from the heart
just sit back and listen that will be your part
Embracing a life shared with the world
he awakens thoughts to touch our soul
we never knew this could exist
where minds and souls share a common goal
He tells us stories of days gone by
reach for the morning hope rises again
reach for the morning our dreams take flight
possibilities blind us as we reach new heights
(Chorus)
He is the one to take us there
to the place that we are longing to be
look at us know, amazing somehow
that we seem to be lost in his dream
we like the song, and sing along
our arms raised up high as we scream
we need him now, to show us how
to find the answers that are lost in the Trees
(new bridge)
It's magic, we say, what else could it be?
A word, a look, a lyric, a smile
we are touched, we're affected, and changed!
his soul aglow, his eyes, his hand
take it all in, understand if we can
<remove original bridge from this spot>
Hey storyteller - we want to hear your song
we want to come on your trip through music land
he's in the show - look at him go!
Don't take your eyes off of him for a second
<alt suggestion: Don't blink your eyes or you may miss something good>
Coming over to see him tonight
so natural, like breathing 'cause he is like light
he walks on stage in white pants
our hero, our white knight
The storyteller is so hypnotizing
we surrender he takes control
others may try but only you succeed
'Cause they don't know what I need
(chorus)
He is the one to take us there
to the place that we are longing to be
look at us now, amazing somehow
that we seem to be lost in his dream
we like the song, and sing along
our arms raised up high as we scream
we need him now, to show us how
to find the answers that are lost in the Trees
<and the instrumental out works the first few chords to "Trees" and ends>
As I said - that's a *suggestion*. Doesn't neccessarily have to go that way but there were some pieces in the middle that didn't seem to quite fit while I was trying to put music to them. I set up the music with an acoustic but kept it so that I can add in some nice crunchy electric bits as well. And that's where I'm stopping for the night!! ZZZZZZZZZZZZ.......